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Thursday, April 25, 2019

Dead Constructions

 Dead constructions are sentences that contain or begin with the words "it is" or "there are" in past or present tense. Dead constructions force the writer to use a weak verb like "is" when a stronger verb could be used. They can force the subject toward the end of a sentence if they are placed in the beginning.

 Example:

From The Chicago Tribune March 28, 2019




Explanation: 

This sentence used the present singular tense of "is." The weak verb pushes the subject, Thomas Kokoraleis toward the end of the sentence. A stronger verb can be used in place of "is" to give the sentance more meaning. 

Revision:

Where Thomas Kokoraleis plans to live remains unclear.  Alternatively: It remains unclear where Thomas Koloraleis plans to live.
The verb "remains" replaced the weaker verb, "is." 

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