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Sunday, April 21, 2019

Passive Voice

Passive Voice is when the subject is acted upon, instead of active voice where the subject is taking action. Active voice is usually preferred in journalism unless the subject is unknown or unimportant.

Example: 
                      The New York Times February 22




Explanation:

The yearbook was edited by Nichole Carroll, she is acted upon. What is really important, her being the editor of USA Today, is pushed toward the end and loses its impact. Nichole Carroll being the current editor of USA Today and in the past editing this yearbook with racist images is more important than the yearbook itself. 

Revision : 

"USA Today's current editor in chief, Nichole Caroll edited that yearbook when she was 21."
Active voice cuts down on a few words in the process and impacts more than the first sentence. 

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